It has potential. One think I noticed is that there is very little (if any) dynamics in this piece. It sort of just "dies on the vine" after about a minute or so. Add some dynamic contrast, expecially at moments when the melody jumps more than a third (I think heard a few in there). You could also try introducing new instruments to carry the melody. This will add more color and interest to the theme. The same string patch playing the same thing gets old fast. I also noticed that you stayed in the same key and roughly had the same chord progression for the entire piece. Add some accidentals! Make the listener questiont their ears for a second and either reward them or punish them for it (whatever is your taste). Your melody seems to wander a little bit too much as well. For the most part, it has a reletivly standard stepwise movement with occasional interval jumps. I guess all I can say is be a little mroe ambitous with it. Add some dissonance. Add more intruments. Add some dynamics! With a little work this could be great!
ok ill try to work on it, make it different add some pep to it, thanks for the review
I liked it!
I liked this piece very much. Your grasp of polyphony and counterpoint is very good. Overall good texture changes with the addition of different orchestral sections. Very fluid as well! Well done ! I couldn't identify the central "theme" though - which is fine if it doesn't have one - If it does though I apologize for my bad ear training :-P. Very uplifting - Very good all around!!! I hope to hear more work like this!
P.S! Could ya review a few of my pieces when you get a chance??? Particulary my latest orchestral work that is also "triumphant"... haha Thnaks man!!!
:) Thanks for your review!
This piece has several different themes placed together, kinda like what polyphony is! :D (I had to look that word up, lol!) Some of those themes in the song, such as the slow theme in the middle, I had wrote over a year ago, but I decided to see if I could include it. :)
Anyways, of course I'll review some of your pieces! ^_^
I like it
Its nice - simple but effective. Keep up the good work :)
An Experiment in Chromatics...
I liked the foundation, but you could have done so much more with it. Going up and down the chromatic scale only gets you so far after awhile. :-/ . Next time try taking the song somewhere - You could have messed around with the Em scale a bit as a melody, perhaps an eighth note progression starting on E, jumping an octive up, then dancing downards in a jazzy sort of way before the induction of the bass again. If you throw in some variation as well this song would be much more appealing. Great start though - good luck in the future - you have great potential.
Reminds me of a futuristic chinese city
I like the intro - its a pretty cool melody. My only complaint is that I can't really hear the inner voices from :28 to :47. If you brought those voices out (possibly by toning down the bass so that the effect at 1:03 isn't diminished) it would at a lot more depth to the melody. Nice job though. Listen, rate, and review my latest one (raiden's pursuit) if you get a chance. Looking forward to hearing more from you.
Wow, thanks for the great and informative review. Although I dont redo my songs after I finish them (my inspiration goes elsewhere) I'll apply this knowledge in my other songs. As for your song, ill get around to it sometime between now and tomorrow =]
Maybe some more variety...
Sounds very evil and dissonant, but alot more can be done - If you plan on making it into a full blown song, you could progessivly increase the speed on the string melody and change some of the intervals to keep the listeners ears in check... and then throw in something else in another voice thats in the same scale (Bbm I think... or Cm with diminished 2nd)... and more tubular bells! (haha I think thats what I hear) Other than that nice work.
Thanks, maybe ill see what I can do with it and post it again (lol, that would be my third evil anthem :P)
I like it... Yeah... Maybe a little more build into the climax around 2:02 but other than that I liked it. When I first listened to it I felt like it needed some voices -like some chick singing something in the back - because there is definately potential for a kick ass melody. Yeah dude nice work -rate and review my newest one if ya get a chance!
Thanks for the review... I don't really play around with a lot of extras... if you've listened to any of my other songs you'll notice the simplicity of my beats. I've never once used vocals... tho I might try to convince my GF to do some vocals for me.
Thanks for the review. I'm checkin out one of ur songs now.
I like it - relaxing in a way - I'm curious... what do you use for your orchestra/string sounds? I just use my keyboard (only way I know how... check out my latest submission)... is there another way though?
I use fruity loops, make the chordsschemes on the stringpatch in soundfonts :D
Thanks for listening 2 tha track,
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